Persuasive: Final Draft
Convertible Mustang
For elementary students
Hey kids have you ever seen a cherry red convertible Mustang driving down the street? Well I have and I can remember how much I wanted one. If you have ever seen one what did you think about it? Let me tell you why the convertible Mustang is such a nice car.
The first reason I believe you should buy a convertible Mustang when you grow up is because of its convenience. The main reasons for its convenience are it has a convertible hood where if it’s a hot day you can put your hood down. It has a lot of space in the driving seat allowing you to move around freely. Its air conditioning is faster then your normal car too.
Another reason is that they are really fast. They can go zero to sixty M.P.H. in 4 seconds! Plus the wheels that come with the car are built for hard turns at fast speeds. The axle is also built for high speeds. So as you can see this car is mad for speed.
As everyone knows that has seen a Mustang they look awesome. When you go and but the car you get to chose the paint job, and personally I prefer the electric blue. Plus the Mustang is a sports car and you can’t go wrong with a sports car. As I told you earlier it also has a convertible hood so you can be riding in style.
In conclusion I would highly suggest you buy a convertible Mustang when you are older. I doubt that you would be disappointed if you did. Plus as sports cars go the Mustang is relatively cheap. So what do you have to lose?
Aaron
2 Comments to “Persuasive: Final Draft”
Stephanie CSU (October 19, 2009 at 1:54 PM)
Aaron,
Your organization of your persuasive final is really well done. You have and intro and a conclusion paragraph as well as middle paragraphs that support your main claim. I love the passion you put in writing overt his topic, it is evident to the reader. However, may I suggest that to strengthen your claim you cite the "facts" and "data" that you use to point out why ford convertible mustangs are the best buy. If you cite the facts your using it allows the reader to confirm the credibility of what you’re saying, thus furthering the persuasiveness of your paper.
ava (October 23, 2009 at 12:33 PM)
1. cherry red convertible mustang
2. hood, really fast, paint job
3.its good
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