Persuasive: Final Draft
Drugs are bad, scary, and deadly. They can get you into trouble and you can start hanging out with the wrong people. People that do drugs or start drugs usually say that they are happy but really inside they feel like crap. People that usually start drugs end up making you start drugs or even worst, they can give you second hand smoke. Then you just end up dying early. You end up getting in trouble with the law, even if your not doing them or doing anything, but they’ll still get you in trouble.
If your getting over drugs, then you should go through the stages of quitting drugs. If you quit, you quit getting in to trouble with the law and they will have no reason to stop you, because you ain’t doing anything, but some cops will just stop you to check on how your doing. Also if you quit, you start to gain the trust you lost from your friends and family, even better you start getting the love from your family back to. One more great thing about quitting drugs is that you can go back to school and finish off were you last left.
Why you should never even start drugs in the first place, is a good way to start a good path, and also a successful future. If you never start drugs, your putting your self out there to start playing all kinds of sports. You also never lose the trust of your friend and family, even there love which you’ll never lose only if you stay drug free. If you never start drugs then for sure your going to have more open doors for your future.
Randy
10 Comments to “Persuasive: Final Draft”
joey (October 9, 2009 at 9:35 AM)
1.Your way to have stages to help is a good start.
2.The true is that you don't get in trouble it helps you stop and don't think of drugs.
3.I agree with you all the way.
Alfredo (October 9, 2009 at 12:26 PM)
1.Drugs are bad.
2.If you stop you'll stop getting in trouble.
3.I think that's true
Alfredo S Gtz
Anonymous (October 13, 2009 at 5:47 PM)
This is a good topic to discuss in your responce. To help you organize your ideas, you can start each paragraph with an opening sentence. Starting each paragraph with an opening sentence can help your readers better understand the point you are going to make. You did a good job of seperating different ideas into differents paragraphs. However, your paragraph might flow better if you explain why you have those veiws on drugs and why you think people shouldn't do drugs. Lastly, in your last paragraph you started your paragraph with a question. If you add a opening sentece to that paragraph it can lead to why you question the use of drugs.
Aaron (October 23, 2009 at 7:35 AM)
First I think it's great what you are talking about. I like the way you wrote it and what it stands for.
Jeremy (October 23, 2009 at 8:00 AM)
Ha ha that has happened to me before but it was different. I was so damn scared cause I didnt have a drivers licens and I had stuff on me.
Jeremy (October 23, 2009 at 8:08 AM)
I like this story. I like that you can see that if you quite all this stuff then you can get closer to people. Also that you see that it makes you destroy your life. Then you identified that you can chang that you just have got to change your mind set.
bonni (October 23, 2009 at 10:42 AM)
hey hey hey i like this one it really hits home for me! its so true drug are so bad for you and they do nothing but mess with you and the onlty thing you end up doing while you are under the influence is dig a deeper grave for your self.evry prick evry hit is another foot deeper till eventually you look up and cant see reality cause the light is gone!........ think before you act bonni
Brandi (October 23, 2009 at 10:53 AM)
Your three points are very true. I agree with your first point that drugs are bad for your health. I also agree with your second point, it is a little sloppy and confusing though. I did not understand your third point though. Your essay was good on letting the reader know what you are talking about. It does get a little sloppy and confusing at points but it was still a good essay.
stefany (October 23, 2009 at 11:09 AM)
drugs are deadly , they can get you in trouble and hang out with the wrong crowd. I agree drugs make you act dumb and are to cause other people laughter and make you look stupid. I'm glad that you realize they are horrible things
Fernando soto (October 23, 2009 at 12:18 PM)
this is a great thing to talk about especially in this school, because most of the people here are here because of drugs. so it was really good
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